思路點撥
圖畫中一個已經(jīng)喝得爛醉如泥的司機,車頂上還馱著一瓶巨大的啤酒,汽車卻依然在路上飛馳。雖然這幅圖有點夸張,但是它卻反映了一個觸目驚心的安全問題:醉酒駕車。寫作時可以按照以下的脈絡(luò)展開論述:
第一段:描述圖畫;第二段:分兩個分論點進(jìn)行論述:提高安全意識、提高社會責(zé)任感;第三段:建議措施、強調(diào)后果。思維拓展
實際上,本文的內(nèi)容和行文思路,不僅僅適用于醉酒駕車,還適用于所有關(guān)于安全事故和社會責(zé)任的圖片話題。
例如,火災(zāi)、漏油事故、施工事故、違反交規(guī)等等一系列與安全或社會責(zé)任感相關(guān)的話題,都可以參考此文。
高分范文
What a scary and sensational scene it is! In the drawing, the driver, as drunken as a fiddler①, is driving fast on the road, with a large bottle of beer on the top of his car. What is conveyed by the picture has both realistic and alarming implications for each member of the country.
The profound meaning of the vivid drawing can be elaborated in terms of both awareness of security and social responsibility. For one thing, consciousness of safety should be one of our top priorities. Life is one-way journey: you cannot experience it twice. So life is to be respected and awed②。 It is cruel to and inhumane to spell the end of any life, with a careless driving under the influence (DUI)③。 For another, to act as a responsible member of the society, each of us should bear social responsibility. We do not live only for ourselves but also for those whom we love and who love us. It is irresponsible to claim either lives of drivers or lives of other victims are not important, leaving the families and relatives into deep grief and, may be, great living burden④。
In short, it is imperative that legislative measures should be taken by the authority to punish drunk drivers severely such as suspending their driving licenses or even putting them into jail. Besides, the mass media, such as TV, radio and website, should work together to enhance awareness of security and sense of responsibility to reduce the rate of car accident.
佳作妙譯
這是一幅多么可怕的觸目驚心的場景啊!在這幅圖中,爛醉如泥的司機正在馬路上飛速行駛,車上還頂著一大瓶啤酒。這幅圖所傳達(dá)的意義,對我們國家的每一位成員,都具有現(xiàn)實和警醒的意義。
這幅栩栩如生的圖畫的深刻意義可以從安全意識和社會責(zé)任感兩個角度闡釋。一方面,安全意識應(yīng)該是我首要重視的問題。生命是一次單程旅行:你不能經(jīng)歷兩次生命。所以我們應(yīng)該敬重生命、敬畏生命。由于醉酒駕車的疏忽而宣告任何一條生命的結(jié)束是殘忍的、不人道的。另一方面,作為這個社會負(fù)責(zé)任的一員,我們每個人都應(yīng)該去承擔(dān)社會責(zé)任。我們不僅僅是為了自己活著,我們也為那些我們所愛的和愛我們的人活著。無論是聲稱司機的、還是受害者的生命不重要,都是不負(fù)責(zé)任的。因為這會給他們的家人和親戚帶來巨大的悲痛和沉重的生活負(fù)擔(dān)。
簡言之,官方應(yīng)該制定立法措施嚴(yán)厲地懲罰醉酒駕車的司機,例如吊銷駕照或進(jìn)行監(jiān)禁。立法措施勢在必行。此外,電視、收音機、網(wǎng)站等大眾傳媒應(yīng)該共同努力來提高公民的安全意識和責(zé)任感,以降低交通事故的發(fā)生率。
名師點評
① as drunken as a fiddler: 醉得像一個游蕩者。實際上是一個比喻,相當(dāng)于漢語中的爛醉如泥。用語非常形象生動,一個酩酊大醉的司機形象躍然紙上!
② Life is one-way journey: you cannot experience it twice:非常富有哲理性,語言優(yōu)美、地道。respected and awed: 敬重和敬畏,語言簡潔、有力、到位。
③ DUI: 醉酒駕車,也可以寫成:drunk driving.
④ leaving…:動詞的ing形式作伴隨狀語。句型經(jīng)典。